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The Kitchen Is a Zoo
Metaphors: saying one thing is another
Lesson 2 of 12 Year 5
Task 1 gives the letter of the right option as printed on the sheet. Task 2 lists the mistakes in the order they appear, with the correction. Task 3 and 4 answers are models, not the only acceptable wording: any answer that uses the rule the lesson taught should be credited.
MildA metaphor says one thing is another. No like, no as.
1 · Tick the metaphor
a Ab Bc Bd AA = left option, B = right option
3 · Now you write
Model answers
The kitchen was a zoo.
Gino was a rocket.
The oven was a dragon.
4 · Help Polpetta
Polpetta is a chef is true, so it is a fact, not a metaphor. A real one: Polpetta is a volcano when the soup burns.
2 · Find the 3 mistakes
1
Our slow tortoise is a rocket.
Our slow tortoise is a parked car.
2
The hot ovens are icebergs.
The hot ovens are dragons.
3
The old lift is a cheetah.
The old lift is a snail.
At lunchtime it is a beehive works (the decoy). Any metaphor that really shares the quality is acceptable in the corrections.
MediumA metaphor says one thing is something it is not. The reader has to see what they share.
1 · Tick the metaphor
a Bb Ac Bd AA = left option, B = right option
3 · Now you write
Model answers
Tick: a zoo, a beehive · The noisy classroom was a zoo.
Tick: a fridge, an ice rink · The freezing playground was a fridge.
Tick: a cloud, a nest · My cosy bed is a cloud.
4 · Help Polpetta
Gino is a waiter is a fact: he really is one. The soup was like lava is a simile, because it uses like. A metaphor: The soup was lava.
2 · Find the 3 mistakes
1
The heavy melons are feathers.
The heavy melons are bowling balls.
2
The fishmonger's booming voice is a whisper.
The fishmonger's booming voice is a foghorn.
3
The slow old baker is a rocket.
The slow old baker is a snail.
The rainbow of fruit and the stink bomb cheese work: they are the decoys. Any metaphor that shares the quality is acceptable in the corrections.
SpicyA metaphor makes the reader do the work. Choose one that shows exactly what you mean.
1 · Tick the metaphor
a Ab Bc Ad BA = left option, B = right option
3 · Now you write
Model answers
The storm was a drummer who would not stop.
The train was a tin of sardines.
Monday morning is a heavy coat I cannot take off: it shows how tired and weighed down I feel.
4 · Help Polpetta
Gino is a whirlwind between the tables. The soup was lava. A simile compares with like or as; a metaphor says one thing is the other, so it makes a stronger claim and the reader does more of the work.
2 · Find the 4 mistakes
1
The coffee was sugar, bitter and black.
The coffee was tar, bitter and black.
2
The croissants were bricks, light and flaky.
The croissants were feathers, light and flaky.
3
Our wobbly table was a mountain.
Our wobbly table was a newborn foal.
4
The owner's warm smile was a freezer.
The owner's warm smile was a fire in winter.
The lighthouse and the swan are the two metaphors that work. Any rewrite that shares the quality is acceptable.