Answer key · not for pupils Writer's craft sequence
Stir, Stir, Stir!
Repetition and rhythm
Lesson 10 of 12 Year 4
Task 1 gives the letter of the right option as printed on the sheet. Task 2 lists the mistakes in the order they appear, with the correction. Task 3 and 4 answers are models, not the only acceptable wording: any answer that uses the rule the lesson taught should be credited.
MildSay it again on purpose: round and round and round! Clap it to feel the beat.
1 · Tick the one with repetition
a Bb Ac Bd AA = left option, B = right option
3 · Now you write
Model answers
It was cold, cold, cold!
Drip, drop, drip!
We walked and walked and walked.
4 · Help Polpetta
Chop, chop, chop the carrots! Stir, stir, stir the soup!
2 · Find the 3 boring repeats
1
We went to the café and had soup.
We sat down and had soup.
2
Then we had juice.
After that, we had juice.
3
Then we went home.
At last, we went home.
Hot, hot, hot! is repetition on purpose (the decoy). Any change that stops the accidental repeat is acceptable.
MediumAsk: is the repeat on purpose? Does it make you feel something? Read it aloud and clap the beat.
1 · Tick the one with repetition
a Bb Ac Ad BA = left option, B = right option
3 · Now you write
Model answers
Tick: Closer and closer came the footsteps., Tap... tap... tap... went the footsteps. · Closer and closer came the footsteps. Tap... tap... tap...
Tick: Splash in the sea, splash in the sea!, Sand and sun, sand and sun! · Splash in the sea, splash in the sea! Sand and sun, sand and sun!
4 · Help Polpetta
It has no repeated words and no beat to clap. Better: Chop, chop, chop the carrots! Stir, stir, stir the soup! Chop and stir, chop and stir!
2 · Find the 3 boring repeats
1
At the market she bought bread.
She bought a warm loaf.
2
She bought the bread for lunch.
It was just right for lunch.
3
She walked home and had lunch.
Back at home, she sat down to eat.
Heavier and heavier and heavier is repetition on purpose (the decoy).
SpicyRepeat on purpose to build tension, speed or fun. Short lines speed it up. A refrain ties a poem together.
1 · Tick the one with repetition
a Ab Bc Ad BA = left option, B = right option
3 · Now you write
Model answers
Creak. The door opened. Creak. A step on the stair. Creak. Closer now.
Red and gold, we never fold! Run and pass, we're top of class! Shout it loud, we make you proud! Red and gold, we never fold!
Repetition for effect makes the reader feel something, like time passing or fear growing; repeating by accident just makes writing sound flat.
4 · Help Polpetta
Two plain instructions with no repeated words have no beat. Better, with a refrain: Chop, chop, chop! Stir, stir, stir! Into the pot, piping hot! Chop, chop, chop! Stir, stir, stir!
2 · Find the 4 boring repeats
1
The beach was nice.
The sand was warm and golden.
2
Then we built a sandcastle.
We built a sandcastle with four towers.
3
The sandcastle was nice.
It was the best sandcastle we had ever made.
4
Then the tide came in.
Closer and closer crept the tide.
Wave after wave after wave and And then... it was gone. repeat or pause on purpose (the decoys).